Wednesday, 15 March 2017

The magic box

here is the recount i wrote on monday without editing




Today room7 blindfolded.we were playing a game and we had to guess what Miss Ashley put in her magic box.

This morning Miss Ashley was explaining how to play the activity. Miss Ashley brought food and objects with her magic box. She made a magic box by recycling out of a coke can box and she made a hole in the box so that we can feel the food or objects in the coke can box.

When it was my turn i had musterd and it was slimy and disgusting. It had  powerful smell and it was smooth and yellow.

When it was kordell’s turn he had a tea bag and when he squeezed it water came out and it was soft,smelly,squishy and it smelt like herbal.


I think it was really fun and cool because i got to


Did I remember to include….
Title
Introduction
Who, what, when, where, why, who, how
3 paragraphs - burger model
Conclusion - my own thinking/reflection
Specific adjectives
Simile/Metaphor
Different punctuation
Short sentence for effect
Correct spelling throughout the story
A sentence you have added in editing
A sentence you have moved in editing
Sentence starters given
Here is my edited story.


  • As I stood waiting, my heart was
  • I put my hand nervously into the box, and I felt
  • When Miss Ashley put the blindfold on, it felt like
  • The class giggled as
Today room7 blindfolded.we were playing a game and we had to guess what Miss Ashley put in her magic box.

This morning Miss Ashley was explaining how to play the activity. Miss Ashley brought food and objects with her magic box. She made a magic box by recycling out of a coke can box and she made a hole in the box so that we can feel the food or objects in the coke can box.

When it was my turn i had mustard and it was slimy and disgusting. It had a powerful smell and it was smooth and yellow. Miss Ashley tried to make me smell it but i didnt want to and when i put my hands in it i screamed ewwwww!!!!! . It felt like slime from a frog.


Today room7 blindfolded.we were playing a game and we had to guess what Miss Ashley put in her magic box.

This morning Miss Ashley was explaining how to play the activity. Miss Ashley brought food and objects with her magic box. She made a magic box by recycling out of a coke can box and she made a hole in the box so that we can feel the food or objects in the coke can box.

When it was my turn i had musterd and it was slimy and disgusting. It had  powerful smell and it was smooth and yellow.

When it was kordell’s turn he had a tea bag and when he squeezed it water came out and it was soft,smelly,squishy and it smelt like herbal and he guessed it straight away.

I think it was gross because my hand got covered in mustard and it was weird.

I hope that we can do it again because it was really fun.



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