Sunday, 1 July 2018

How to use dialogue


Focuses for writing this week
Explanation in my own words.
Where do speech marks go
Before and after the sentence the person said.
How to put in other punctuation
Any punctuation has to go before the speech mark.
When to start a new line or when to keep writing
When 2 or 3 people are talking.
Different words for ‘said’
Asked, replied, responded, yelled, screamed, shouted, mumbled, said, muttered, gasped, panting, chuckled, thought, told, uttered, continued, whispered
Adding adverbs
Responded politely, asked politely, screamed angrily.

EXAMPLES
“Who can I pick on?” asked Miss Ashley.
“Me” replied Timote.

“How was your day?” asked Hope.
“Great, thank you” replied Miss Ashley.

“How was your weekend” asked Dwyane.
“It was good” responded Havea.

If more than one person is talking, you put the reply underneath.
Mary was a beautiful girl who was wearing her long black hair in two plaits. She asked her mum, “can I go to the pools today?”.
“Why do you want to go” mum replied.
“It’s hot and I want to cool off”.
“Fine then”

If it’s only one person, you keep going.
Little red riding hood walked along the dirt path and thought to herself “I’m getting hungry”. She had walked a looooonng way but the thought of warm apple pie when she got to grandma’s house kept her going.

MY GROUP’S EXAMPLE.
“Hi Vaiola how was your day?’’said Hope

“Amazing, how was your day Syariah-lee?” Asked Vaiola

“My day was great, thank you for asking” Replied syraiahlee
“What are you doing today Hope” Asked syraiahlee

“OOHH I am really busy because I need to go school then after school I need to go to the gym and then I need to look after my baby sister. How about you Vaiola?”

“Its good but really it busy because we have to go to school then we have to walked back home which is ’real far’. Hope what time do you go to the gym?”

“KNOW!! because I have to leave at 10:40 cause it starts at 11:00”

writing detailed descriptions

Thursday, 28 June 2018

Twinkle Twinkle star colours

Narritive


Start here: one beautiful bright sunny day there was a man named Joseph. Joseph went hiking and he found a waterfall with a vine hanging down it. 


Joseph took his bag and his shoes and socks off and went to grab onto the vine and swang onto it. He had lots of fun.

The magician's elephant

Peter stood outside the tent feeling sad and lonely. Peter was wondering if he should spend the money that he got from the chief to buy some bread and fish. Peter was anxious about if he should go to the fortune teller or to go to buy some fish and bread. 


Peter had to decide not to or to do it, Peter had a difficult choice to make and he was scared to face the consequences when he shows up at the apartment with empty hands. He thought to himself if he should lie or if he shouldn’t. After awhile of thinking he thought that he would tell the truth and face the consequences.


Peter followed his heart and he went into the fortune teller’s tent to ask her a question about his family. The fortune teller told him that his sister was alive and it kept on repeating in his mind “ she lives, she lives, she lives”. 

Music

Today Room 7 learnt how to play "twinkle twinkle little star". on the virtual piano. ( online piano.)
At the same time we learned "this old man". we had to learn the twinkle twinkle little star and then we had to learn how to play this old man.

Narrative plan


Brainstorm of ideas:
Car crash, people inside the car, fire fighters, not looking, fire-fighters, man was driving then suddenly he crashed into a pole, speeding, different kinds of services - police and ambulance. Flipped,
See - people standing around, glass on the ground, windshield or windscreen,  stop traffic, upside down, airbags, fire extinguishers,
smell/hear - gasoline or petrol or oil, smoke, sirens, people talking

PEOPLE/SETTING
PROBLEM
SOLUTION
Drunk driver, John Cena, 60 year old man,
Car crash
A witness calls the ambulance, police and fire service
No glasses so couldn’t see
injuries - broken arm, broken ribs, brain damage, cuts
Fire fighters use jaws of life to get the person out and save them. They cut the car in half.
On the phone
Petrol leak, and the engine was gonna blow up, so the whole car was gonna blow up.
Fire extinguisher, put saw dust on the petrol, get the people out first before it explodes.
Distracting - picking something up, or changing the radio station.





Title:
The crash!!
Intro
2 sentences
One day there was a little boy named Elijah.
Orientation 5-10 sentences
WHEN
WHO
WHAT
WHERE
WHY
HOW
CHARACTERS
One day there was a little boy named Elijah.. Elijah was a 7 year old boy with brown eyes and had black hair. Elijah was at sylvia park with his mum and dad. After sylvia park they went home and chilled for a bit and watched movies then the parents fell asleep and then Elijah took the keys off of the hook in the kitchen and took off.
Problem
5-10 sentences
Elijah took his parent’s car and then he drove off to his mate’s house to pick him up. Elijah and his mate Noah went to the supermarket to buy some food for the journey. Noah got his allowance and he stole a little bit of money from his parents. As they were driving Elijah lost control of the car and he crashed and flipped the car over and a witness saw and quickly called the police and the ambulance.
Solution
5-10 sentences
The fire fighters came and they put out the fire and used the jaws of life to cut open the car and then grabbed Elijah and Noah.
Conclusion
Less than 5 sentences
Then they went home and they forgave their son for what he did. But he still ended up in hospital.